First Draft: First Draft Feedback

 After filming our first draft of our film, we allowed one of our peers to review it and give us feedback on it. She critiqued our film and provided us with some ideas to consider and what we should change to make it better.  

For the opening scene, she commented that there wasn't enough credits and that the font didn’t match the aesthetic of Christine. Our peer included to provide more backstory/exposition and recommended a voiceover of Christine talking about her relationship with Mercedes. She also recommended improving our title slide with expressive visuals and to take out the play video transition. She told us we need a theme song that would match the storyline and to incorporate it during Lizzy’s conversation with Mercedes. She added that the volume needed to be higher during conversations and to add more sound effects. Our peer evaluated our use of colors and said color theory could be improved by adding weird and whimsical colors that challenge conventions. She suggested a yellow filter over the bathroom scene and to incorporate continued consistency when Christine locks Lizzy in the closet. To improve our hook, she also suggested a scene where Mercedes finds Lizzy’s bag with her ringing phone stranded as she is trying to get a hold of her on her cell phone. 

I am thankful for our peer for taking the time to analyze our film and to help us find ways to make it better. We will consider all her remarks and comments when finalizing our film.